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Prologue: A First-Year Writing JournalVolume 2 Article 112010Commentary on "Coping with the Oklahoma CityBombing: Emphasizing Ideas of Rescue andRecovery in the Face of Tragedy for Children"Allison KranekDenison UniversityFollow this and additional works at: http://digitalcommons.denison.edu/prologuePart of the Arts and Humanities CommonsThis Article is brought to you for free and open access by Denison Digital Commons. It has been accepted for inclusion in Prologue: A First-YearWriting Journal by an authorized editor of Denison Digital Commons.Recommended CitationKranek, Allison (2010) "Commentary on "Coping with the Oklahoma City Bombing: Emphasizing Ideas of Rescue and Recovery inthe Face of Tragedy for Children"," Prologue: A First-Year Writing Journal: Vol. 2 , Article 11.Available at: http://digitalcommons.denison.edu/prologue/vol2/iss1/11 41 JSTOR. Denison University Lib., Granville, OH. 1 Dec 2009. http://jstor.org Wright, Stuart A. Patriots, Politics, and the Oklahoma City Bombing. New York: Cambridge University Press, 2007.   Work Consulted  Barr, Stephen. “10 Years Later, Hope Has A Home in Oklahoma City.” The Washington Post. 17  April 2005, final ed: C02. Bragg, Rick. Somebody Told Me: The Newspaper Stories of Rick Bragg. Tuscaloosa: University of Alabama Press, 2001.  David, Dillon. “Oklahoma Memorial Competition Helps to Heal Community.” Architectural Record 185:6 (1997): 31. Academic Search and Complete. EBSCOhost. Denison University Lib., Granville, OH 17. 17 Nov. 2009.  http://search.epnet.com  Freeman, Evelyn B., et al. “Children’s Books: Ways of Words.” The Reading Teacher 50.7 (1997): 588-597. JSTOR. Denison University Lib., Granville, OH. 1 Dec. 2009. http://www.jstor.org Kight, Marsha, ed. Forever Changed: Remembering Oklahoma City, April 19, 1995. Amherst, New York: Prometheus Books, 1998. Osbourne, P. “A City Cries For Its Lost Children.” Courier Mail. 19 April 1996. ---. “Remember the innocents.” St. Petersburg Times. 25 April 1995, city ed.: 8A. Strauss, Valerie. “Shipments of Comfort; Oklahoma City Sends 100,000 Teddy Bears and Children’s Letters to Schools.” The Washington Post. 4 October 2001, final ed: B03. Rosenblatt, Roger. "How We Remember.” Time 155.22 (2000): 26. Academic Search Complete. EBSCOhost. Denison University Lib., Granville, OH. 17 Nov. 2009. http://search.epnet.com.      42 Commentary by Allison Kranek    One of the challenges of college writing is incorporating research into argumentative essays and using that research as convincing evidence to support one’s arguments. Not only did Keara do a fantastic job of smoothly incorporating several scholarly sources into her own writing, she also explains who her research is coming from and why he or she is qualified to be speaking on that particular subject—in doing so, Keara adds legitimacy to those sources, which further strengthens their effectiveness. In addition, before getting too far into the paper, Keara provides a context for her readers, giving them pertinent background information to familiarize the reader with, for example, the theories she discusses throughout the rest of the paper. Another of her paper’s highlights is its clear organization and structure. She balances and effectively transitions from the general to the specific. It can be difficult in papers that switch from the broad to the specifics for the reader to keep track of which one the author is discussing, so one of the main areas we worked on during our session was clearing up a few ambiguities in the paper where it was unclear whether she was talking about children in general, for example, or the children who witnessed the Oklahoma City bombing. We also examined ways Keara could expand the section in which she talks about children healing adults, since that portion is small compared to the adults healing children section—doing so, as her final draft illustrates, gives the paper more balance and lends more support to the second part of her thesis. Overall, Keara’s paper is a fabulous example of a paper that contains a clear thesis, logical organization, good context, and effective transitions, as well as a paper that combines research and secondary sources with in-depth analysis to construct a convincing argument.     

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